I start to climb the beanstalk to get to the clouds. Finally I reach the cloud where I pull out my tomato mustard sandwich. Then a grey ugly looking hyena jumps over from the cloud next to me and tugs viciously at my delicious sandwich. Then I yell “No No No. Bad doggy.” So he sits down next to me looking miserable. I rip the sandwich in half and hand one half to him. Then he asks “Will you be my friend?” “Of course” I say very delighted. So then we slid down a rainbow and live happily ever after.
The Happy Friends
I start to climb the beanstalk to get to the clouds. Finally I reach the cloud where I pull out my tomato mustard sandwich. Then a grey ugly looking hyena jumps over from the cloud next to me and tugs viciously at my delicious sandwich. Then I yell “No No No. Bad doggy.” So he sits down next to me looking miserable. I rip the sandwich in half and hand one half to him. Then he asks “Will you be my friend?” “Of course” I say very delighted. So then we slid down a rainbow and live happily ever after.
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jackie
2/7/2015 03:29:49 pm
Hi Madi,
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Madi N.
2/9/2015 01:45:27 am
Thank you so much. I'll take the advice. I always love to get some constructive criticism!
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Jane Hewitt
2/7/2015 11:52:20 pm
Well done for using all of the prompt words. I really like the 'magical' element to your story the beanstalk and sliding down a rainbow! Some excellent descriptions, well done. Jane Team 100 WC Barnsley UK
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Madi N.
2/9/2015 01:49:32 am
Thanks. I really enjoyed all of the prompt words. They got me thinking and really helped me write my story. The 100 word challenge was so much fun!!
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